Monday, December 24, 2007

Results of Signboard Competition!

Here are the results of the competition as promised. Not a very difficult decision since there were only 4 entries by 3 brave souls :)
I've also corrected some slips of grammar in the entries...nothing very major but they are things we can learn from. I must say I'm very impressed with all the entries!
And the winners are (drumroll please...):

1st prize:
diRty
Do not feed the monkeys in the museum.
Do not bring any food or plastic bags into the museum to prevent any (the word 'any' is not very necessary and makes the sentence a little confusing) attacks from the monkeys.
Do not provoke the monkeys as they will attack you.
Please take care of your children. Do not carry any toys and always stay close to your children.
It is dangerous to interact (the word 'interact' seems to be used more frequently for humans rather than animals. 'It is dangerous to have any form of interaction with the monkeys' might be clearer) with the monkeys. They are not afraid of humans.
Note: The museum will not be held responsible for any accidents that occurs (either 'any accident that occurs' or 'any accidents that occur').

2nd prize:
Joanna
1.DO NOT FEED THE MINKEYS (monkeys haha!) IN THE MUSEUM.
2.DO NOT BRING ANY FOOD NOR ('or'. we only use 'nor' with the word 'neither') PLASTIC BAGS INTO THE MUSEUM AS THE MONKEYS WILL ATTACK YOU AND ENDANGER YOUR LIFE.
3.DO NOT PROVOKE THE MONKEYS AS THEY WILL BITE YOU.
4.PLEASE TAKE EXTRA CARE OF YOUR CHILDREN AND DO NOT CARRY ANY FOOD OR TOYS INTO THE MUSEUM AND STAY CLOSE TO YOUR CHILDREN.
5.AS THE MONKEYS ARE NOT AFRAID OF HUMANS, PLEASE DO NOT INTERACT WITH THEM AS THIS WILL PUT YOUR LIFE AT STAKE. ('put your life at stake' sounds a little extreme)
NOTE: SHOULD ANY ACCIDENTS ARISE, THE MUSUEM WILL NOT BE RESPONSIBLE FOR IT (the 'for it' sounds redundant. 'The museum will not be held responsible' / 'will not bear any responsibility' will suffice).

3rd prize:
R3D L19H+
Do not feed the monkeys in the museum.
Do not bring any food and carrier (Hm..I think you changed this word because you think 'plastic bags' is a Singlish term. Actually it's a proper English term so you can just leave it. 'Carrier' is rather vague) is actually into the museum as it may land u into (in) a life-threatening situation due to the monkeys who may be attracted to it. ('as the monkeys may be attracted to them')
Do not provoke the monkeys as they will bite you.
Please pay loads of attentions ('loads of' is rather informal, 'attention' has no plural form. 'Extra attention' should be fine) to your children and make sure they do not carry any food and toy.
Stay close with ('to') your children.
The monkeys are not afraid of humans, thus do not interact with them as it is very dangerous!
Note: The museum will not be held responsible for any mishaps, injury or loss of life (since 'injury' is singular, it may be better to have 'mishap' in the singular form) that may occur.

Bonus prize:
R3D L19H+ (for sending in the first entry and putting in the most effort to provide alternative vocab and sentence structure...and even sending in 2 entries!)

Congratulations to all the winners! Prizes may be redeemed after 2nd January at 128 Serangoon Ave 3, ext 130.

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